My Face is a Pig

Lothaar

Here'a children's poem I wrote, I'd love to hear feedback on it. As well as being silly, there's a moral to it and I'd particularly like to know if it comes across or if it's lost amidst the silliness.
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My Face is a Pig

My face is a pig and in it
Lives a cat from Kathmandu,
Who purrs and furs and sniffles,
With a bad dose of the ‘flu.

My hat is also a cat,
With twinkly, blinkly eyes
That can see through walls and windows
And uncover any disguise.

For you see there are people,
Both large and not so big,
With snuffly cats inside their face,
Which is, in fact, a pig.

And when my hatty-cat perceives
A pig-face approaching me,
He tells the badger in my belly
And warns the hippo in my right knee.

Then my belly will wobble to and fro
And my knee adopt a stance,
With one leg bent behind my back
To do the pig-face dance.

“Pig-face, pig-face, dancey-doo,”
I’d shout and scream and cheer
And walk on by the pig-face,
My cat-hat in the air.

Beneath his disguise the pig-face
Will always smile with glee,
And all day long be glad and think
To himself: “It’s not just me.”

Le Rack

Everyone is different, and has their own weird and wonderful way and you should lern to accept that in yourself as well as in other people?

Lothaar

Le Rack wrote:

Everyone is different, and has their own weird and wonderful way and you should lern to accept that in yourself as well as in other people?

Boom!

I didn't mean to sound like I was asking people to play 'Guess the Moral!', but you can't conceal the hidden meaning too much in children's poems.

Le Rack

Nah, it's okay I like kinda stripping poems to find their real meanings!