The inner turmoil of a shoe

HOT_ALPHA_MALE

As I walk through the valley of the "Shadow of Shoe",
I take a look at my feet and realize that they ain't so neat,

Grabed my polisher with my right,
Took the buffer in the left,
I'm the "Dirt Banisher" on weekdays,
I make that filth suffer.

I walk away with my Dubes at bay,
Just in time for the buffet.

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Just started writing it and couldn't stop! See if any of you can pick up on the hidden meaning.

FunkyChicken

That's really something! Is this your first poem? It's really good. The imagery is quite impressive, not to mention the secret jab at people who wear dubes being fat! The use of rhyming took my breath away also. 5 stars for you my friend.

HOT_ALPHA_MALE

aww thanks

It was also a dig at modern rap. This is why it starts out with a rap and changes so dramatically when i notice my shoes. I'm not just cleaning my shoes but i am cleansing modern society of this "new wave" of poetry if that's what people call rap these days.

HOT_ALPHA_MALE

Black shoes, Tapping in my head
Tapping tapping;

I can feel the hate, see the pain.
The blood of my fears, dyeing my shoes.
Nothing can clean them now, nothing can clean me.
I can no longer see, the laces are cutting deep.
The river of pain that flows inside me is leaving now

I can not feel now, can not feel,
The tapping
tap, tap tap.

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ahh Yup i have to say i do like this one myself. I thought of it while watching the sun rise this morning! . It has the same shoe theme with a little different content i guess.

ANarcho-Munk

You should post poems in different threads rather than just using one thread.

HOT_ALPHA_MALE

Well i didn't want to post too many similar poems and clog the boards. I felt that keeping similar ones together would be appropriate.

FunkyChicken

ANarcho-Munk wrote:

You should post poems in different threads rather than just using one thread.

Way to not even comment on his poem!

Hot Alpha Male I really enjoy your poems! Im subscribing to this thread now.