"Acid-Reign"

RopeDrink

Hey there...

Right, basically (For those remotely interested in novels) "Acid-Reign" is something I've been tinkering over the years... Three years actualy (and funnily enough, it still hasn't gone too far from there... Impatience - Novel Writing = Bad Mix)

Funnily enough, even my CS clan is based on this novel... I love it dearly, but haven't had the time to brood over chapters etc...

Anyway - I've written a few chunks of it, and have dropped the main story plot here at http://acidreign_.homestead.com/storyselection.html - Don't bother going there unless your able to put up with note form sketches and low-detailed text...

It's a basic Science Related Thriller, based around this time...

If you do take the time to give it a gander, please give me some feedback or constructive criticism... It would be well appreciated... None of this "It's ****e" shinanigins... I already got that off the thread I posted on the CS boards about it

Anyway, enough of my dribble... Praise god, I hope to take the time to continue this work, but we shall see

PS. Any other budding novelists / story writers out there!? Are there any other writing communities!?

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JustHalf

Just going on what I do, may/may not be gospel.

Cut down on the head jumping. If you are going to describe the emotions of two people, you shouldn't have the narrative read both minds - it gets confusing. Instead, try to describe as many emotions as possible by observation. This, I believe, will strengthen any piece.

If you stay in the mind (or near it) of one character at a time (for longer periods) it will help the reader to associate with them.

RopeDrink

Cheers for that!

Like I said, It's all in severe note form, so at least I don't have to worry too much about smacking the overall story around a bit with a fat arséd Mackrel...

Again, thanks...