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tattoo poem

Silent Grape · 2004-10-23 18:25:19

This is a poem i wrote about my new tattoo, again, feel free to critisize. This swirly twirly writing, Entwining my wrist, Tightening, and releasing Burning and cutting Freeing and hoping - For another day, Another chance, Another way around the wrist.

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23-10-2004 7:25pm

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Silent Grape

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This is a poem i wrote about my new tattoo, again, feel free to critisize.

This swirly twirly writing,
Entwining my wrist,
Tightening, and releasing
Burning and cutting
Freeing and hoping -

For another day,
Another chance,
Another way around the wrist.

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#2 24-10-2004 12:10pm
shiv

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i like it, especially the first and last lines

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#3 27-10-2004 12:14pm
Silent Grape

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cheers, thanks. still working on the first stanza, seems a bit twee and obvious to me, but anyway, thanks

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#4 28-10-2004 2:53pm
Shad0r

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I like it, I think mainly because it says alot without saying alot.

If that makes any sense.

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