~foreigner musings~ (feedback appreciated from the natives :)

shiv

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the walls are anxious in themselves
yet they whisper asylum in the pale blue silence
where i sit watching a solitary horse
out the window
grazing at nothing

on an upraised hill
leaning myself out the distance
to try and touch young profanity
as it walks by
in track-suit bottoms

for there are no screens here
to keep the obscenities out
from darkening the green

there are only manic-depressive faucets
spurting hot and cold water
that can never come together
long enough to be lukewarm

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no blinds to break the morning gently
just night that loves arriving early
and stealing afternoon away into a memory

but i am being emotionally cushioned nonetheless
in this scary trans-atlantic trek
wanting to give up the urge to roam
longing for home
all too soon

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the calmness of washing up
making things clean again
with a mournful girl singing in the background
of what has been
difficult but now exorcised
through song

just as the suds of thoughts
dissipate on utilitarian plates
my hands do not slip-slide
so much
these days

they stack the pros for life instead
as i let the leftover waste down the drain
that's always been plugged up
with a stubborn hanging-on
in my head

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Shad0r

there are only manic-depressive faucets
spurting hot and cold water
that can never come together
long enough to be lukewarm

I really like that verse.

(Are you shiv from veneratio?) Welcome to boards either way

keu

scarily brilliant :eek:

shiv

thank you so much for your feedback shad0r and keu!
it's so nice when you get a response, it feels like you're not just sending stuff into the big black cyber-void

i don't know this other shiv, shad0r, or where veneratio is!
i'm from canada myself, just outside toronto..

Shad0r

ah ok, nm
Different shiv so...

AngryBadger

Now that's an excellent poem

shiv

thank you angrybadger!