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Silent Grape

this is a poem i wrote when i was very angry. i wrote it all in one go so its very unpolished. what i want to know is, does it have any potential, should i keep working on it, or is it not worth it? should i start again?


I dont have much to say anymore
Time has drifted feelings away
Im tired of waiting
Im tired of trying

to ****ing adapt to circumstances i cannot control
im tired of remembering the past.
im tired of trying to please you,
to make you last

leave me alone
let me be

Cant believe i let you see!

if only i knew how you felt!
if only i could tell how emotions melt

you screwed about with my small emotions for too long

now i can go
now i can release

The secrets from my past are hitting me -
like evil karma

give me your mind and let me shake it
give me your heart and let me hurt it

when i was with you my heart was generous, you have closed me up
when i was with you my smile was honest,
you have given me poetry

my tears have no meaning,
leave them in the ground

im afraid to be alone
im afraid not to be alone
im afraid to be with you
im afraid of myself.

munkeehaven

wow those are some really potent feelings..leave it as it is because its spontaneous, i like the rawness of it, its a great poem imo:)

Battlesnake

Brilliant work. Really connected with me and I'm sure many others.
Few minor tweaks here and there maybe, but basically leave it as it is.
A powerful, strong poem