*haunting pain

cat_rant

As black as coal.
As dark as fear.
A fires light.
They circle nere.

They jump at me,
they call my name,
Help me please!
They play their game.

I sit alone,
With little wood.
The fire dims,
I'd run if i could.

I cannot run I cannot stay!
The fire dims and fades away

Now they come,
They cannot rest.
One minute more,
One minute less.

As there fangs pirece my pale warm flesh
I wimper I cry!
A warrior.... my body feels sore

Yet without being dead,
I live no more....

jebus i wrote this when i was 13 says alot doesnt it....

Silent Grape

its very expressive and turbulent. i genuinely like it.

especially the last two lines. very powerful, if a bit insensitive and obvious.
for a 13 year old its ****ing amazing.

alleepally

Would echo the words of the previous poster. That really is something for a 13 year old. I liked it .

cat_rant

thanks guys its good to hear posetive feed back. ive been reading this forum for a while and finally plucked up the courage to post so thanks.