Great piece of writing if that really is your first attempt. I'd highly recommend you don't make it your last.
I'm going to make some constructive critical comments to guide, hoping that you do keep writing: have a few reads before you post, make sure it's the best you can do before you ask somebody to read, because you may only get once chance. Watch the punctuation and grammar (e.g. ****er,' not ****er', - the comma goes inside); trivial stuff but people get really upset at such things. Wind down on the exclamation marks and italics, use your language to portray the emotion. Put in a section break before you switch character viewpoints, though in a piece this short you should stick to one character.
A tip for the future: you just sat down and wrote this so you don't know where it's going yet, but if you were starting off a short story or a novel, I'd want to get more of a clue. I want some buy in to get me through the euuuugh! moments of pools of vomit. Those are gorgeously awful, but help me to believe that there will be something worth wading my way through this for.