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untitled as yet. poem

  • 08-04-2005 6:45pm
    #1
    Le Rack
    Closed Accounts Posts: 9,846 ✭✭✭


    I wrote this in like 5mins this morning. the words just started forming, i put pen to paper and this was the result.



    Sitting
    Staring out, into space
    Among the chaos, among the calm
    Striving to find my place

    Dancing in the woods
    Where the lost souls hide,
    Flying through time
    All but everything by my side.

    In the middle of a crowd,
    In the town park,
    Alone in the quite,
    Alone in the dark

    Its all the same
    Left on the edge,
    They think its a game.
    But now they're all dead.

    Killed by their lies.
    Killed by their hate.
    Love, it stands strong,
    Twisting my fate.

    Reaching for the future,
    Forgetting the past,
    Knowing this fact,
    Our live, it can last.


Comments

  • #2
    Le Rack
    Closed Accounts Posts: 9,846 ✭✭✭Le Rack


    okay anyone got a title for me?? and by the by the last line is actually meant to be
    "Our love, it can last"


  • #3
    Chucky
    Closed Accounts Posts: 528 ✭✭✭Chucky


    "Drifting"

    "Solitarily Optimistic"

    "Nurtured By Pain"

    "Lost"

    "Wistfully Optimistic"

    "Outlook"

    ?????


  • #4
    Le Rack
    Closed Accounts Posts: 9,846 ✭✭✭Le Rack


    i like "Nurtured By Pain", thanx! not sure if it quiet fits though, it has to feel perfect...


  • #5
    Chucky
    Closed Accounts Posts: 528 ✭✭✭Chucky


    What about:

    "Reflecting..."

    "My Reflection"

    "Life's Reflection"

    "Serene Solitude"

    ??? I know what you mean about it having to be perfect. If I write a poem I always think of the title first.


  • #6
    Le Rack
    Closed Accounts Posts: 9,846 ✭✭✭Le Rack


    sometimes that works but if you think of the title first you sometimes have no where to go after that but thanx for the help


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  • #7
    Chucky
    Closed Accounts Posts: 528 ✭✭✭Chucky


    I know what you mean. Sometimes, having picked a title I then try to adhere to what that title means and get sidetracked and lose the creativity that had suddenly built up inside my mind.

    ...major bummer. Just call it 'Untitled'. hehe


  • #8
    Le Rack
    Closed Accounts Posts: 9,846 ✭✭✭Le Rack


    yeah thats where i was headed with "untitled (as yet)"!!
    thats happened me so many times in songs, Iv got a title first verse and chourus with great subject matter and then it dissappears!! Iv had one song in the works since before christmas!!!


  • #9
    *FuzzyApple*
    Closed Accounts Posts: 4 ✭*FuzzyApple*


    "Gently She Waits" .... I dont know hehe its your creation


  • #10
    Chucky
    Closed Accounts Posts: 528 ✭✭✭Chucky


    Leave it as 'Untitled'[.i].

    I had an untitled poem in my collection for about 18 months. I just went back to it one day recently and a title instantly came to my head. Perhaps you need to be absent from whatever mood you were in when you wrote the poem. I assume you write it recently?


  • #11
    Le Rack
    Closed Accounts Posts: 9,846 ✭✭✭Le Rack


    yeah as it says it took five minutes on the morning of the day i posted it


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