Good enough CV ??

iCrazzy

I have attached a CV which I worked hours and I mean hours on, lol
It might not be the best but I am hoping that it impresses most employees and if any mistakes or adjustments needed to be made, you guys could give me a hand.
I have given random and sample names and info where needed to be to protect my privacy.
Thanks




MOD-NOTE .. thanks for the reports, but we can assume the OP has done the sensible thing given the sentence that I just bolded.

irish_goat

Your font changes in the hobbies and interest section. Also, not sure if "I have a fondness of cleanness" sounds good at all, tbh.

iCrazzy

irish_goat wrote: »

Your font changes in the hobbies and interest section. Also, not sure if "I have a fondness of cleanness" sounds good at all, tbh.

Thanks I have changed that, what could I write for the cleaning so...
Cuz I love cleaning and being tidy, I would work my house off by cleaning it daily as if it was being sold I love fixing up repairs and making things look better.

iCrazzy

irish_goat wrote: »

Your font changes in the hobbies and interest section. Also, not sure if "I have a fondness of cleanness" sounds good at all, tbh.

''I have a fondness of cleaning and perform daily tasks at home.'' ?

john_cappa

Needs alot of work!

"Who is keen to learn" ? as a sentence?

iCrazzy

john_cappa wrote: »

Needs alot of work!

"Who is keen to learn" ? as a sentence?

Okay I took that part out, what do you mean by a lot of work, could you tell what is I need

john kinsella

What kind of job are you looking for? If it is retail or something like that make some refrence to that in the CV somewhere.

Start with something that will catch their eye, something like this.....

Good luck in the search & good to see people making an effort



I am a motivated, hard working and enthusiastic individual with a willingness to learn and a drive to succeed.

I am willing and able to bear high levels of responsibility. I make decisions and plan and control situations well. I always communicate honestly, openly, and consistently. I am able to evaluate information quickly, identify key issues and formulate conclusions based on sound, practical judgement, experience, and common sense.

I work very well in team situations and have a low requirement for supervision. I gain huge satisfaction from working and dealing with new people and am a friendly open-minded approachable person.

iCrazzy

Just to let you know this cv will be used for work experience not as a professional paying job.

iCrazzy

john kinsella wrote: »

What kind of job are you looking for? If it is retail or something like that make some refrence to that in the CV somewhere.

Start with something that will catch their eye, something like this.....

Good luck in the search & good to see people making an effort



I am a motivated, hard working and enthusiastic individual with a willingness to learn and a drive to succeed.

I am willing and able to bear high levels of responsibility. I make decisions and plan and control situations well. I always communicate honestly, openly, and consistently. I am able to evaluate information quickly, identify key issues and formulate conclusions based on sound, practical judgement, experience, and common sense.

I work very well in team situations and have a low requirement for supervision. I gain huge satisfaction from working and dealing with new people and am a friendly open-minded approachable person.

Thank you so much for taking your time out, well basically I will be going around many types of jobs, tech, hospital. So I will make reference and change that bit up for every single job that I go to so that it is relevant to that job

john kinsella

No bother, you are better off as you say tweaking it slightly for different rolls.

If you are looking for experience with no pay you should have a good cover letter done up too mentioning this (again tweaking it for different roles). Once you get your foot in the door somewhere you're laughing.

Best of luck again

SHANAbert

You have a 'passion for teamwork'.

What kind of work experience are you looking for? You have good JC grades in technical subjects.

iCrazzy

john kinsella wrote: »

No bother, you are better off as you say tweaking it slightly for different rolls.

If you are looking for experience with no pay you should have a good cover letter done up too mentioning this (again tweaking it for different roles). Once you get your foot in the door somewhere you're laughing.

Best of luck again

Thank you again and good luck to you, if you do not mind me asking just 2 quesitons..

1) A CV with 3 pages, is that alright ? as I heard that a good CV is usually 2 pages
2) I have made a resume, so shall I use a cover letter instead, what is the point of a resume ??
Are you supposed to give 3 documents with your application ??

Thanks

iCrazzy

SHANAbert wrote: »

You have a 'passion for teamwork'.

What kind of work experience are you looking for? You have good JC grades in technical subjects.

Well I do not know yet, my work experience is to be started in January so I decided to get my CV and other documents ready for it.

I will go around every shop basically, lol.
So that is why I do not have a specific job in mind.

I will just go with the flow what ever business picks me, obviously I will have an interest in the business, I do not want to work in a hairdresser or something.
My future is either business or medicine

john kinsella

iCrazzy wrote: »

Thank you again and good luck to you, if you do not mind me asking just 2 quesitons..

1) A CV with 3 pages, is that alright ? as I heard that a good CV is usually 2 pages
2) I have made a resume, so shall I use a cover letter instead, what is the point of a resume ??
Are you supposed to give 3 documents with your application ??

Thanks

You don't need a CV & a resume. A CV is just a longer version of a resume. Just stick with the CV and that's all.

Ideally 2 pages CV would be better if you were to condense it slights. (Maybe take out JC results and just mention how many honors subjects and results). If you want to leave these in you can just say at the end 'references available upon request' and take out your 2 references.

2 docs with application. CV & cover letter

Faith

There's no need to include anything about your leaving cert, seeing as you haven't done it yet. There's also a number of spelling mistakes in the first 3rd. List your junior cert results from highest to lowest - the first result you see now is a D which doesn't look good.

Bandana boy

Responsible for not of

iCrazzy

So thanks to most of ye I have improved my CV
So how do ye guys think, improvement then first one ??

Devia

Looks pretty much the same or is it just me?

My 2c below

-Get rid of Curriculum Vitae up the top - Top should have your name, address, email, phone
-Get rid of Date of birth - not necessary
-JC - Unless you got all A's I would just say how many honours you got
-LC you could drop to one line e.g. Leaving Cert 2016 - English, Maths, Biology, Chemistry, Business, Italian (Honours Level) - In progress
-Work experience - Pack this out some more because with no qualifications this is all a potential employer will be interested in IMO
-Referees - Just say 'by request'
-Signed/Date not necessary.

Should fit nicely on one page.

iCrazzy

Improvement ??

professore

Your work experience switches between past and present tense, e.g. handling and handled. Should all be past tense. Run a grammar check, there are lots of grammatical errors.

Also not sure about the intro paragraph, should be moved down the page IMO or dropped altogether.

Bepolite

It needs to come down to 2 pages. I really wouldn't dedicate so much space to your results unless they've been requested and even then you can just provide a transcript.

There are a lot of formating and grammatical errors that need attention. If you list like this:

The Job I did;
you can use commas,
to divide the bullet,
points.

If you list like this:

The Job I did:
You need not
use any punctuation
between lines

If you list like this

The Job I did
You can use.
full stops.
if you like.

BUT what ever you do pick one style and stick to it.

Bepolite

Here's some changes, shrink the box to make it two pages. Make the formatting more consistent and get rid of the different types of bullet points, use one type. You were using way to many word to describe basic professional concepts IMHO.

Oh and your date of birth needs to stay on this for what you're doing.

Stheno

iCrazzy wrote: »

Improvement ??

Firstly you've far too much personal information posted in that attachment, delete your name, address, phone number and email from the attachment you've posted on here. Also you've posted an incredible amount of personal information about your referees on the web too! Pm a mod and ask them to remove this, I've reported your post for that reason.

That aside, I think your opening paragraph is well over the top for what you are aiming for. I'd change it to

I am a motivated, hardworking and enthusiastic individual with a willingness to learn and a drive to succeed.

I enjoy taking on responsibility for tasks. I believe in communicating honestly, openly, and consistently.

I work very well in team situations and have a low requirement for supervision. I enjoy working and dealing with new people and am a friendly open-minded approachable person.

You're still in school but some of what I've deleted is real management speak and not really appropriate for the roles you are going for tbh.

I'd also change the formatting and grammar of your work experience.

So instead of

 Market Trading, Montreal, Co. Down July 15 – 10 Aug 2013
Position: Market Salesman
• Served customers with high quality goods (clothing) and participated in refunds and exchanges.
• Dealt with customer queries and complaints.
• Participated in regular stocktaking.
• Responsible of the sales of a product.
• Arranging for appropriate display of goods.

with increased font and a larger bullet point for the title/position, I'd just have it the same size, with the position details in bold.

Also for the above, you need to change it to

Market Salesman, Market Trading, Montreal, Co. Down July 15 – 10 Aug 2013

• Serve customers with high quality goods (clothing) and deal with refunds and exchanges.
• Deal with customer queries and complaints.
• Participate in regular stocktaking.
• Be responsible for product sales and arranging display of stock.

I'd also rearrange your c.v. as follows:

1st Personal Details, name address, phone/email.

2nd: Work experience

3rd: Education

4th: Hobbies, I'd get rid of the cleaning one, it's bizarre.

5th Achievements: I'd get rid of the Build a Bank it's duplication as it's in your work experience.

Format the c.v. to 12 point font throughout
Get rid of the referees, and the signed/dated stuff, and you are down to 1.5 pages, which is still abnormally long for someone still in school.

I'm in IT over 16 years, and my c.v. is 2 pages long.

colly10

I'd get CV off the top line, they know it's a CV.
Personal details has a colon after it, the other headings don't. Get rid of that for consistency.
Who is keen to learn should not be a new sentence.
You work well under pressure, get rid of "can work well".
Decrease the blank space in the box and just add a line break after.
Put your college above national school.
Remove your LC results, you don't have them.
Make dealing with queries and complaints and stock taking the first 2 points on your sales job.
For the bank job you provided an excellent customer service ... not provide, wrong tense for the rest of the sentence. They also visited if you interacted with them, not visit.
Put achievements above hobbies.
Sort out the formatting for achievements and hobbies so it's consistent with the rest.
Get rid of the bit on cleaning the house, even if it's true, it's hard to take seriously.

Hope it's clear, on the phone. Hope ye get what your going for.

iCrazzy

Thank you so much guys for your time, Stheno I was talking to the mod and he said it was fine as all the info is false and inaccurate there is no school with that name, no business nor address or any referees.
I will take all your considerations in account

Stheno

iCrazzy wrote: »

Thank you so much guys for your time, Stheno I was talking to the mod and he said it was fine as all the info is false and inaccurate there is no school with that name, no business nor address or any referees.
I will take all your considerations in account

That's ok then, normally when you post something like that online you blank it out so people don't worry.

Mrs OBumble

Stheno wrote: »

Firstly you've far too much personal information posted in that attachment, delete your name, address, phone number and email from the attachment you've posted on here. Also you've posted an incredible amount of personal information about your referees on the web too! Pm a mod and ask them to remove this, I've reported your post for that reason.

OP, your referees phone numbers look make-ee-up-ee .. I'm assuming that their names and probably your school name are too.

If not, then yes, please do report your posts (not PM) yourself and we will snip the files out.



And with my non-mod hat on: underlining was for the days when we had manual typewriters (yes I'm old enough to remember ) and no other choices. You have bold, italics, different fonts and sizes ... no need for underlining!

iCrazzy

So do we all agree here that I should take out my LC results, the CV TITLE and the cleaning bit ??....
The only reason I thought I would put in my LC was bcs in case someone who will be hiring would think ''since this guy has science or business subjects he would be great for this...

Stheno

iCrazzy wrote: »

So do we all agree here that I should take out my LC results, the CV TITLE and the cleaning bit ??....
The only reason I thought I would put in my LC was bcs in case someone who will be hiring would think ''since this guy has science or business subjects he would be great for this...

Yes take it out.