Poetry

RiverOfLove

I enjoyed reading the poetry thread that's going on here in after hours about cash for a wedding present.

I've been trying for a couple of weeks to write a poem about a disappointment that occured and how that made me feel but I'm having no luck.

I have a few lines and bits but aside from that there is no structure to it and it's just a piece of sh1te but I'm not giving up yet.

Any ideas to get me going or moving along with writing a poem?

kneemos

Seriously...Drink.

Fr_Dougal

RiverOfLove wrote: »

I enjoyed reading the poetry thread that's going on here
in after hours,
about cash for a wedding present.

I've been trying for a couple of weeks to write a poem,
about a disappointment that occured and how that made me feel,
but I'm having no luck.

I have a few lines and bits,
but aside from that there is no structure to it,
and it's just a piece of sh1te,
but I'm not giving up yet.

Any ideas to get me going,
or moving along with writing a poem?

Not bad....

dodderangler

Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
Your thread sucks,
And so do you!

How was that. Good aint I

Muise...

The Creative Writing forum might have a good thread for advice on poetry.

http://www.boards.ie/vbulletin/forumdisplay.php?f=382

I'd say what you'd get here would be more prosaic!

My tuppence worth is to give it time to write itself.

Wacker The Attacker

Dear disappointment,

f**k you.

dont ever come back here again or i'll cut your stones you facking cant

Muise...

Wacker The Attacker wrote: »

Dear disappointment,

f**k you.

dont ever come back here again or i'll cut your stones you facking cant

disappointment
has no stones
and that is why
it is disappointed

The Backwards Man

I wandered lonely as cloud
Then I went home.

Pumpkinseeds

Well, the most successful Irish poets have all written depressing and dreary poetry that should be kept away from anyone with suicidal thoughts, so that's probably the way to go. Kind of like country music but more depressing and dreary, and if you could drag it out to a couple of verses where a line or two would suffice, so much the better:D

Ghost Train

If you choose the road not taken
And someday just before the rain-drop ploughs down your carved name
Do you mind if I wear a hat to your funeral?

FixdePitchmark

It doesn't have to rhyme
All of the time
Look at rocks and passing horses
And the dying

Use the poetic trick
think with your heart and ...
iambic pentameter, ulysses too
Dont ask me , havent a ****ing clue

Drink all the time
see clear water when slime
think of the dead
Never go to bed

Die young and poor
unrequited love
let the thoughts go
then just let it flow (with some awful symbolic metaphor for life for strife)

dmc17

RiverOfLove wrote: »

I enjoyed reading the poetry thread that's going on here in after hours about cash for a wedding present.

I've been trying for a couple of weeks to write a poem about a disappointment that occured and how that made me feel but I'm having no luck.

I have a few lines and bits but aside from that there is no structure to it and it's just a piece of sh1te but I'm not giving up yet.

Any ideas to get me going or moving along with writing a poem?

"A disappointment occurred which left me disappointed
So I wrote a poem which was completely disjointed
Then I went onto boards and created a thread
But then I said fcuk it and went back to bed"

Done. No need to thank me. (Unless you make a fortune out of it which is unlikely but if you do I want royalties)

Henlars67

Poetry is pointless.

I like novels, short stories, plays, songs with good lyrics, but I have never once had any enjoyment of reading a poem or hearing one recited.

What's the point of them? To torture leaving cert students?

Lapin

The Backwards Man wrote: »

I wandered lonely as cloud
Then I went home.

You got that all wrong man.

Here's the right version.


I wandered lonely as a cloud,
That floats on high o'er vale and hill,
When all at once, I heard a shout,





























































GET OFF MY FÚCKING DAFFODILS.

TheBegotten

Just go ABABCC DEFEFE with a diatonic meter and interpretive use of non-linear assonance and hyperbolised onomatopeia to express your insatisfaction. Simple.

Lapin wrote: »

You got that all wrong man.

Here's the right version.


I wandered lonely as a cloud,
That floats on high o'er vale and hill,
When all at once, I heard a shout,
...

/thread