original work, looking for collaboration

RocknRollDoggy

here is a few lyrics im working on. have loads of stuff written down but would like to work with others to write music and maybe sell on or record ourselves. think the lyrics speak for themselves. tks hok.

i cut myself today
the scars take the pain away
i know what they all say
i wasted my life away
on love and all its peril
fell in love with the wrong girl

they know thats all i know
it was along long time ago
along time ago.

it hurt again today
the lies take the pain away
i looked into her eyes
tried to look past her lies
her love is easily swayed
she cant be kept at bay

but that was along long time ago
her love is all i know..

cloptrop

Im getting some vibes off this song man , im not sure whether to do a country sound to it , kinda like johnny cash or a rocky version kinda like 9 inch nails.
I reckon i could prob do up a quick demo of both and see which one you like more.i hope its up to your standards,
Heres my attempt , can i call you my capitan or the next bob dylan.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7rKV6Eddqpg&feature=fvst
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gjwgYvzQWS4
I saved a few quid up to get videos made for them , im sure you will reimburse me when we are famous.
I just so want to be part of this band , your lyrics are so awesome where do you get them from?

cloptrop

actually that was a bit harsh man im sorry , there is a bit of a likeness though dont you agree?

RocknRollDoggy

the way i actually have the song is total diff to HURT. thats the thing when you write something theres always the possibility it sounds like something thats been done before. but i can see where your coming from. nothing wrong with a sence of humor.

cloptrop

ill tell you what in the next few days ill send you some music , i have to record it first , im only really getting into recording stuff lately , see if you can put lyrics on it that arnt someone elses, , its hard to start writing something at the start and it not ending up sounding the exact same as something else, everything i first wrote sounded like song 2 by blur,

RocknRollDoggy

cloptrop wrote: »

ill tell you what in the next few days ill send you some music , i have to record it first , im only really getting into recording stuff lately , see if you can put lyrics on it that arnt someone elses, , its hard to start writing something at the start and it not ending up sounding the exact same as something else, everything i first wrote sounded like song 2 by blur,

apart from the opening line which can be changed lyrics are not the same. that song is about drugs mine dif isnt. would be cool to write with someone else.

I hurt myself today
To see if I still feel
I focus on the pain
The only thing that's real
The needle tears a hole
The old familiar sting
Try to kill it all away
But I remember everything

[Chorus:]
What have I become
My sweetest friend
Everyone I know goes away
In the end
And you could have it all
My empire of dirt
I will let you down
I will make you hurt

I wear this crown of thorns
Upon my liar's chair
Full of broken thoughts
I cannot repair
Beneath the stains of time
The feelings disappear
You are someone else
I am still right here

[Chorus:]
What have I become
My sweetest friend
Everyone I know goes away
In the end
And you could have it all
My empire of dirt
I will let you down
I will make you hurt

If I could start again
A million miles away
I would keep myself
I would find a way