To celebrate 100 poems.

Insect Overlord

A little piece of poetry about poetry. Feedback, as usual, would be great.

Issues of Editions

Esoteric ramblings and
The in-jokes of strangers.
Treatises on life.
Comments on holidays
Shared by two or three.

Is this how we present
Our craft, risking the danger
That verbose lines might
Cause readers’ eyes to stray?
Is this how poems should be?


Tommy Collins

Matt Holck

my eyes stray to often skipping thought
sweeping for images

Insect Overlord

Matt Holck wrote: »

my eyes stray to often skipping thought
sweeping for images

I've written plenty of poems with far more striking imagery, I'll admit that!

Just thought I'd throw that one in here to see if it would get much of a reaction. I've put up all my new pieces on my bebo page but so far none of my "friends" have given me any kind of feedback :rolleyes:

Will post one of the more aesthetically pleasing pieces soon

sitout

An File wrote: »

A little piece of poetry about poetry. Feedback, as usual, would be great.

Issues of Editions

Esoteric ramblings and
The in-jokes of strangers.
Treatises on life.
Comments on holidays
Shared by two or three.

Is this how we present
Our craft, risking the danger
That verbose lines might
Cause readers’ eyes to stray?
Is this how poems should be?


Tommy Collins

i would love to read more of your stuff. this was not bad imo

Reilly616

An File wrote: »

A little piece of poetry about poetry. Feedback, as usual, would be great.

Issues of Editions

Esoteric ramblings and
The in-jokes of strangers.
Treatises on life.
Comments on holidays
Shared by two or three.

Is this how we present
Our craft, risking the danger
That verbose lines might
Cause readers’ eyes to stray?
Is this how poems should be?


Tommy Collins

I like it, though I think it would benefit from a rhyming scheme.

Insect Overlord

sitout wrote: »

i would love to read more of your stuff. this was not bad imo

Thanks sitout. There's a link to my Bebo poetry page in my sig if you want to check out the rest of my work, and I'll hopefully have some new ones to post here soon.

Reilly616 wrote: »

I like it, though I think it would benefit from a rhyming scheme.

Glad you like it Reilly. I tried to make line 1 rhyme with line 6, 2 with 7, etc,
but I was more concerned at the time with getting my point across. I might revise it a bit, will post it here again if I do.

Reilly616

An File wrote: »

Glad you like it Reilly. I tried to make line 1 rhyme with line 6, 2 with 7, etc,
but I was more concerned at the time with getting my point across. I might revise it a bit, will post it here again if I do.

Ah, I hadn't noticed that, but now you point it out I really like that idea. To be honest I'd say it's better as is than with a traditional rhyme, i'm just more into structure than freeverse. But yeah, great poem. I'm sure many can relate to it.

Nearly~November

Thumbs up from me... noice.

smithrdn

Great poem, quite contemporary:):):)

D4RK ONION

An File wrote: »

I've written plenty of poems with far more striking imagery, I'll admit that!

Just thought I'd throw that one in here to see if it would get much of a reaction. I've put up all my new pieces on my bebo page but so far none of my "friends" have given me any kind of feedback :rolleyes:

Will post one of the more aesthetically pleasing pieces soon

You get plenty feedback on the boards of rage! Don't pretend we don't love you!

Good poem, like the rhyming scheme!

Insect Overlord

Thanks for the replies folks