New song, please listen and comment.

shakesgar

Can you please have a listen to this simple home recording i have made from pro tools and a crap laptop and comment? Its also an original song i have written from my debut album which i plan to record in a studio at the end of the year. This song is currently ranked 8th on my album so i have much better songs to record but not at home for fear i might ruin them. Anyway it's a simple commercial sounding song so go easy. And hey; use headphones or at least a decent stereo to listen proper. And don't be afraid to turn it up!!

Any musicians looking to start up an all originals band please email.

shakesgar@gmail.com

http://www.myspace.com/garethburke

Thanks

siobhan.murphy

excellent!
great lyrics really enjoyed it.

G86

Just gave it a wee listen,

I wanna hear the rest man!!!

class stuff

Chonker

Not to fond of the song..at least the messy arrangement I guess you did the best with what u had. You have a decent sound to your voice, might suggest few lessons to bring it out properly. You have a habit of bending the last word on a line lower and higher to give it an effect that you dont need keep it simple it actually sounds better. My 2 cents. If ever a singer was going to do well in a studio it will be you trust me though dont blow your money and time until you can master your voice, lessons will sort that. Maybe even a good producer when recording. Good luck.

jay-susman

It sounds good man!! I would say you need to work on the overall arrangement aswell, like the bits that are supposed to be big need to be bigger and the build ups into those parts would need a bit of work. The ending could do with some tidying up aswell!
For the most part your singing is fine, there were a couple of tuning issues but only small ones and in the begining there were some timing issues, not just with your voice. Later with some of the harmonics aswell i think.
I would say leave the busier singing until the end of the song, you dont want to say it all at the start and keep saying it the whole way through.
One final thing, where is the chorus? I kinda found it hard to tell and you really want that part of the song to stick out as much as possible!
I know thats a lot of criticism but like i said it sounds really good and for the most part what ive said would only be minor changes. Keep it up man!

Wurly

Chonker wrote: »

You have a decent sound to your voice, might suggest few lessons to bring it out properly. You have a habit of bending the last word on a line lower and higher to give it an effect that you dont need keep it simple it actually sounds better. My 2 cents. If ever a singer was going to do well in a studio it will be you trust me though dont blow your money and time until you can master your voice, lessons will sort that. .

I agree with the above. Bending the note is actually making your voice sound flat. You have a good voice though and it's certainly workable. Certain parts of it just need tweaking.

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