Opinions on cover letter?

Swindon

Guys just putting together my cover letter for apps for the summer,what do ye think should i add more to it e.g more specific on company etc or is it better short and sweet,just trying to structure it right....


Dear Sir/Madam

I am a second year honours degree student of xxxxxxxx at xxxxx, hoping to
graduate with a 1.1 degree.

I am looking for work on a full-time basis during the summer months, with a possibility of part-time work when I return to college

I would consider any jobs that might be related to my chosen course of study in your company and can begin work immediately, please find enclosed a copy of my cv.

Please note that my final examination will take place on the xxxx.

I look forward to hearing from you.


Yours sincerely

xxxxxxxxx.

AARRRGH

It would be a good idea to mention the company in the cover letter so it doesn't seem like something you've sent to hundreds of companies.

Apart from that, it's quite good.

I've fixed a small mistake below -

I would consider any jobs that might be related to my chosen course of study, and I can begin work immediately. Please find enclosed a copy of my CV.

I just restructured the sentence a bit.

Swindon

Thanka a million dublindude! I just thought it wasnt meaty enough if ya know what i mean

stepbar

Try and ditch the "Dear Sir / Madam" part and target your greeting i.e "Dear Mary".

Eoin

dublindude wrote: »

It would be a good idea to mention the company in the cover letter so it doesn't seem like something you've sent to hundreds of companies.

Absolutely - the cover letter is where you can use more subjective terms about your skills and experience, but more importantly, you can tell the company how they would benefit from you working there - and why you want to work there.

MIN2511

stepbar wrote: »

Try and ditch the "Dear Sir / Madam" part and target your greeting i.e "Dear Mary".

There is no way he can say Dear Mary, he doesn't know who is reading his cv. But you can also say, dear hiring manager.
Also "I look forward to hearing from you, or your team in the near future"

Swindon

should i mention the company at the start or in the middle?

Einstein

surely most people would hope to graduate with a 1.1?
Personally I'd leave that particular bit out.

Eoin

Swindon wrote: »

should i mention the company at the start or in the middle?

The middle part, after a brief introduction. Also, just a minor wording change, but I would think about something like:

Change:
I would consider any jobs that might be related to my chosen course of study in your company and can begin work immediately, please find enclosed a copy of my cv.

To:
I would be grateful to be considered for any jobs etc.

I'm probably being pedantic here though.

Einstein wrote: »

surely most people would hope to graduate with a 1.1?
Personally I'd leave that particular bit out.

Agreed, unless you can re-word it to show that a 1.1 is a very likely prospect.

BumbleB

in a business letter you only end a letter with yours sincerely if you know the name of the person you are writing to ,also omit the hoping to graduate with a 1.1 otherwise it's very good .
Also you should mention from what date you will be available from I think thats important too.

Swindon

BumbleB wrote: »

in a business letter you only end a letter with yours sincerely if you know the name of the person you are writing to ,also omit the hoping to graduate with a 1.1 otherwise it's very good .
Also you should mention from what date you will be available from I think thats important too.

Any idea what would be suitable to end it in?

Eoin

Swindon wrote: »

Any idea what would be suitable to end it in?

regards,

Swindon

should be fine.

Swindon

Position held or Duties?

BumbleB

no regards , is polite for email only.,


Yours Faithfully is the correct way to end a cover letter where you do not know the recipient's name .

Swindon

Could i slot in a current project im doing in college into me skills summary?

Eoin

BumbleB wrote: »

no regards , is polite for email only.,


Yours Faithfully is the correct way to end a cover letter where you do not know the recipient's name .

Oops, too used to writing emails! Is "Sincerely" OK too, or is that American?

swindon wrote:

Could i slot in a current project im doing in college into me skills summary?

If it's relevant to the company, and it may demonstrate how it would benefit them, then I don't see why not.

BumbleB

A cover letter really only is a brief intro a taster keep it short because people like to read stuff quickly always make sure their our no typo's or spelling mistakes whatsoever ,the cv should have all project and experience stuff ,main thing on the cover letter is really start date .

You can add your project if it is relevant but don't go overboard , the jobs that you really would like find out who the hr manager name is and send it addressed to him/her personally ended by Yours Sincerely .Also when you go to interview you will most always be left waiting in the reception the reason being is that sometimes thay observe people on camera to watch their behaviour patterns ,body language etc.

stepbar

MIN2511 wrote: »

There is no way he can say Dear Mary, he doesn't know who is reading his cv. But you can also say, dear hiring manager.
Also "I look forward to hearing from you, or your team in the near future"

Well he needs to find out so!!!!! How hard can it be to find out?? Ring up the company and ask who the HR person is. Simple. If they don't give you a name, use plan B.

WhiteWashMan

Swindon wrote: »

Dear Sir/Madam

I am a second year honours degree student of xxxxxxxx at xxxxx, hoping to
graduate with a 1.1 degree.

I am looking for work on a full-time basis during the summer months, with a possibility of part-time work when I return to college

I would consider any jobs that might be related to my chosen course of study in your company and can begin work immediately, please find enclosed a copy of my cv.

Please note that my final examination will take place on the xxxx.

I look forward to hearing from you.


Yours sincerely

xxxxxxxxx.

Dear Sir or Madam,


I would like to apply for a summer position that you may have a vacancy for in your company.


I am a second year student at XXX, studying a degree in XXX, and I am looking for any potential full time work that your company may have over the summer months. I would also be interested in the possibility of further part-time work once university resumes.


I am available from Monday XXXX, and would be happy to consider any positions that you feel are related to my current studies. I have attached a copy of my CV for your reference.






I appreciate your assistance, and I look forward to hearing from you shortly,

Yours

Your Name Here

dr.bollocko

Drop the dear sir / madam. Potential hirers hate that.
Stick with Dear Employer if you have to, but if you can ring ahead and get a name, thats better again.