Lets Cook - 1

Maccattack

I have an idea.

How about we write (and maybe record) a song together.

Say if i give the first line. someone else gives the second, someone else the third and so on...


what you think? worth a try.

I think we need some rules though. lets keep it kinda standard for this one.

Since its my idea I'll set the rules

OK. we'll have

verse
verse
chorus
verse
chorus
Bridge
chorus to finish

each verse, chorus and Bridge is 4 lines.

You can post more than one line but only one line per segment. ie. you cant write more than one line in each verse or chorus. And if say you do the last line of a verse you cant do the first line of the chorus.

the chorus can be different from each other as long as its agreed that they work. they should be the same theme set by the first chorus.

Also if rhyming, dont rhyme with the precedeing line. in other words we dont want

i said to my cat
dont you sit on that mat
ill throw you through the door
if you s**t on the floor

make it

I said to my cat
ill throw you through the door
if you sit on that mat
ill throw you through the floor.

know what i mean? poor cat.


It doesnt HAVE to rhyme either. sup to you.

AND LETS TRY AND STAY AWAY FROM SAPPY LYRICS. I LOVE YOU MISS YOU ETC ETC

OK? who's up for it then?

If we ever make any money out of it we can donate it to a childrens charity like Barnardo's.




Who wants to go first?

Maccattack

Arrrgghhh. Sorry. I meant to put this in the songwritting forum. Can it be moved please?

cornbb

Done.

Sounds like a laugh, actually

Maccattack

cool. so who's first?

Paligulus

Ok!!!

The exhausted mind
Is obsessions easiest prey

estebancambias

my eyes are hooked on you and I cant control my feelings,
but you keep on looking away

squibs

I fancy something citrusy,
I think I'll have an orange

Maccattack

:rolleyes:

Did you guys read the spec?

ONE LINE EACH!!!!

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V1-L1 The exhausted mind


Next!

estebancambias

Here im starving, why is no one cooking.

Brother A

Ok Im confused, but if this is what we got so far:

The exhausted mind
Is obsessions easiest prey
my eyes are hooked on you and I cant control my feelings,
but you keep on looking away
I fancy something citrusy,
I think I'll have an orange

Then I would add:

"If only you were half as sweet
and there was somewhere we could meet, where we could meet"

Brother A

OK! thats both sappy and Rhyming, oops I just read that!, guilty as charged.

But still, maybe the triple rhyme sets up some nice tension before maybe going into the chorus for the next line?.
Also any shift of mood to contrast with the (passing) pop sensibilty would be nicely set up for good impact?

dream brother

...Beneath the checkered sky
I'll send you a sign...

magpie

My legs are made of molten cheese, my arms are made of pine

Maccattack

Maccattack wrote:

:rolleyes:

Did you guys read the spec?

ONE LINE EACH!!!!

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V1-L1 The exhausted mind


Next!

NO! WE HAVE ONE LINE. READ THE FIRST POST.


ONE LINE EACH. NOT TWO
So far we have



V1-L1 The exhausted mind

nyarlothothep

In sadness and pain I slit myself for you...again

Maccattack

How does that make sense????

The exhausted mind
In sadness and pain I slit myself for you...again


Look. Its not that hard. One person puts in a line. then somebody puts another one in.

It all has to make sense. so read what comes before it.

Paligulus started off with 2 lines. He is allowed one. But to get this moving I will add his second

So we now have:

V1-L1 The exhausted mind
V1-L2 Is obsessions easiest prey

Steve_o

If you don't mind me saying so....writing one line each to make a song is a bit like the 1000 monkey's with a 1000 typewriters thing.....theoretically possible but probably wont work!!!

"It was the best of times, it was the blurst of times???":D

nyarlothothep

even though I didnt read the previous line before I posted that wonderful line of emo angst, now that Im reading them together they make perfect sense to me,

an obsessional lover
his/her mind exhausted by obsession
aching with pain and sadness in addition to that mental exhaustion
his/her last act of desperation
slitting his/her wrists in dedication to their beloved because of some cataclysmic event a product of that obsession, which has left them in this state

yes Im seeing the angsty emo demographic for these lyrics, this could be a huge success!

Maccattack

Well OK. If everyone agrees we will allow each person 2 lines.

So we take the first 2 lines from Paligulus

V1-L1 The exhausted mind
V1-L2 Is obsessions easiest prey
V1 -L3 my eyes are hooked on you and I cant control my feelings,
V1-L4 but you keep on looking away

V1-L5 I fancy something citrusy,
V1-L6 I think I'll have an orange
V1-L7 If only you were half as sweet
V1-L8 and there was somewhere we could meet, where we could meet

V1-L9 Beneath the checkered sky
V1-L10 I'll send you a sign...
V1-L11 My legs are made of molten cheese
V1-L12 my arms are made of pine

V1-L13 In sadness and pain I slit myself for you...again

magpie

If that isn't a #1 smash I'll eat my hat

Brother A

You'd never know, although the kind of melody to make that lyric work might have to be fairly special!

And we're still only on verse 1. Could be a real epic!!!

Paligulus

If this gets finished, I'm definately going to take a stab at recording it - But I'm definately gonna ditch the self mutilation line!!!! Gotta think of the kids!!!!

fionated7

draining my veins of this deep crimson blood empties my heart of the memories, your face, your name.


sorry jus kept going wiv the self mutilation thing..

imo the mutilation is better than the molten cheese and pine line.

nervous_twitch

Hmm, now all we need to do is scrap verses 1-4 and we're onto something!

But seriously, is it not all just meaningless drivel seeing as everyone is trying to say something different?

No, I have not contributed

Maccattack

nervous_twitch wrote:

But seriously, is it not all just meaningless drivel seeing as everyone is trying to say something different?

yes. its seems nobody has cottoned on to the original idea. to follow on from the previous line to make something coherant.

oh well