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Mario007

I used to think that one day people will,
People will, stop making me ill,
And still, they don’t know what to feel,
Yeah,
I suppose I’m running down the hill,
But every run comes to a close,
Getting tripped by the feet of my foes,
It goes, from highs always to lows.

Are you with me,
When I’m falling down,
Do you see me,
When I’m on the ground,
When they hit me,
Do you just stand around?

I used to think that I had friends,
My friends, ran away for ten cents,
Hence, I’m thrown outside the fence,
Whoa,
I suppose I can get a contact lens
And the people you mashed,
Dash, watch out cos you crashed.

Are you with me,
When I’m falling down,
Do you see me,
When I’m on the ground,
When they hit me,
Do you just stand around?

I used to feel all the time afraid,
So afraid, my soul might fade,
Get laid, for money confidence was made,
Hey,
I suppose I can close the gate,
But some people I give the key,
Don’t care about the misery,
See, I’m the one laughing at thee…

Are you with me,
When I’m falling down,
Do you see me,
When I’m on the ground,
When they hit me,
Do you just stand around?

Steve_o

Is this a Rap song??? I don't like the rhyming thing you have goin here!! It'd be a much better song if you got rid of the simplistic rhyme! Thats just my opinion, feel free to object!

Steve.

Mario007

Yeah it is a rap song, that's why the rhyming...:D

Maccattack

I really like it.

I know you said its a rap but i can hear a great pop/rock tune there. Sort White Stripesish. Well done.

Mario007

Thanks maccattack, i never reallz wondered about the pop/rock direction wiht these lyrics, but youre right the chorus can be sang a bit popy actually...

Steve_o

Mario007 wrote:

Yeah it is a rap song, that's why the rhyming...:D

Ah....sorry....Well now that i know its a rap song....i likes it!!!!