Past The Parallel

shiv

I don't expect you get on the wrong bus much anymore
I reckon you muscle on to the train in town like any good 9-5 automaton
Eyes hardly flickering at the pier stretching outside your window
Where we sometimes walked after work or on a Sunday

The pang small (if there at all)
Stamped out by your suit and forward-thinking attitude
Put down to a loose page fallen out of a closed book
You call The Past

When it is happening still (all around me)
History hijacking the present during random moments
Hell-bent on utilitarian momentum you preach
Onwards and Upwards from your positivity pulpit

But I caught you in my bed last night
In a freeze-frame time-warp mind game
You lay on your side and told me I had beautiful eyes
How do you explain that?

Half-asleep I heard you rasp those sweet somethings
Curled up beside me in a buzz cut and football jersey
I drifted on a timeless high wrapped in the duvet
In the morning you went out for your usual chicken fillet baguette

You should know that somewhere we are still living out that scene
It is always Saturday and you are remembering to pick up my favourite juice
I am listening to your ipod with one ear waiting for the click
Of the door opening and the television being highered up
Tangible proof that once again you have come back

This continuum is a parallel relationship realm
A narrative spool of thread our memories travel down at whim
There is no beginning and there is no end
Can't you see me waving at you from the other side of the spectrum?
Sometimes when you kiss my cheek I take a trip out here instead

Dylan_James

Strange yet compelling. I liked the opening line here. I also enjoyed for its wit:

"But I caught you in my bed last night
In a freeze-frame time-warp mind game
You lay on your side and told me I had beautiful eyes
How do you explain that?"

Good work Shiv, keep it up.

shiv

Hey Dylan,

Thanks for the positive feedback and for taking the time to post, it means a lot!

shiv

Flattery

Agree with Dylan, it is certainly compelling, and meanderingly melancholic. Among my favourite things I have read on this site.

shiv

Flattery wrote:

Agree with Dylan, it is certainly compelling, and meanderingly melancholic. Among my favourite things I have read on this site.

Thank you for that compliment Means a lot.

Jack Quinn

It evokes that chasm that always seems to exist between the sexes. quite the most interesting poem i've read in a while. you give us these morsels of life; the everyday life and mix them in with disturbingly honest desperation- splendid desperation. i never thought i'd see sylvia plath being markerd by a corner back.
Well done, you're out there, and that's where anyone worth knowing should be:)
ps. don't miss the AGM next month

Jacinta

Really liked this, fabulous read... a world of thought.

shiv

Jack Quinn wrote:

It evokes that chasm that always seems to exist between the sexes. quite the most interesting poem i've read in a while. you give us these morsels of life; the everyday life and mix them in with disturbingly honest desperation- splendid desperation. i never thought i'd see sylvia plath being markerd by a corner back.
Well done, you're out there, and that's where anyone worth knowing should be:)
ps. don't miss the AGM next month

Hey Jack, thanks for your feedback! I think everyday life provides us with loads of raw material from which to create. So why not incorporate it into your work? Your Sylvia Plath comment and analogy made me smile Yes, I am out here in the online abyss, it's a lovely place to get a pick-me-up visit. Oh, and I will be sure to diarize the AGM. And bring doughnuts.

shiv

Jacinta wrote:

Really liked this, fabulous read... a world of thought.

Thank you Jacinta, appreciate you taking the time to post a reply