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Haiku's

Raphael · 2003-10-24 19:46:38

Ok, thought this might be kinda interesting, twas inspired by macdaras scarily good poem. Ill kick things off Summer is ending Leaves float gently from the trees All the world is dark Sorry if its a tad depressing, but im not really a lolipops and sunshine kinda guy also no stealing haikus from cryptonomicon!

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Ok, thought this might be kinda interesting, twas inspired by macdaras scarily good poem. Ill kick things off

Summer is ending
Leaves float gently from the trees
All the world is dark

Sorry if its a tad depressing, but im not really a lolipops and sunshine kinda guy

also no stealing haikus from cryptonomicon!

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#2 24-10-2003 8:21pm

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For the last time I didnt write it =/
oh and

cold floor tiles
missed a kick at the fridge door
it closed anyway

Haiku by Jack Keroauc
used it in my junior cert couldnt think of anything else.

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#3 24-10-2003 8:28pm

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Eh macdara, correct me if im wrong but isnt there 3 syllables in the 1st line of that.

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#4 24-10-2003 9:10pm

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u need to know haikus for the J cert? :eek:

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#5 25-10-2003 10:26pm

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Morning grows darker
Angry thunderclouds roll in
Despair fills the air

Hmm, depressing again. There may be something wrong with me

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#6 26-10-2003 3:57pm

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Originally posted by Jaffer
Eh macdara, correct me if im wrong but isnt there 3 syllables in the 1st line of that.

It's what's called a western haiku. The elegance of Japanese allows the limit of syllables to make the poem more beautiful, but its just clumsy in english.

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#7 26-10-2003 6:00pm

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ok, im confused, traditional haikus are 5, 7, 5 right?

Macdaras was 3, 7, 5

thats working to an even more restrictive limit... or have i misunderstood?

ps

The red sun rises,
Sheperds hide and their wards flee,
Terror stalks the land

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#8 26-10-2003 8:10pm

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That last one was 5, 8, 5. The one about the shepard.

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#9 26-10-2003 8:24pm

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I was treating cower as a one sylabble word, but i see your point. consider it changed.

BTW

Error in Grammar,
Corrected by SPenguin,
Thank you for your time.

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#10 30-10-2003 8:09pm

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This one's a bit ****e but meh:-

Summer came and went
the fun dublin all spent
back to school i went

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#11 04-11-2003 12:50pm

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I'm captivated,
by a girl of great beauty.
I cannot compare.

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#12 04-11-2003 1:45pm

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My One Love,
Source of all Sun
But now gone.

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#13 04-11-2003 1:47pm

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Having trouble counting my syllables, anyone know a checker. I get stuck changing from french into english, diffrenet pronunciations.

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#14 04-11-2003 7:20pm

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my moral status,
now deceased and buried deep,
why do my lungs hurt?

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#15 04-11-2003 7:51pm

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i adore haikus,
they have structured syllables,
this is a haiku.

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#16 04-11-2003 8:10pm

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Nice one steven mate!
Its fun to talk in haiku's
Don't you think people?

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#17 04-11-2003 9:52pm

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oh god no not this
why must we talk in haiku?
my head hurts quite bad.

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#18 05-11-2003 8:01am

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Your god this thread sucks
Haikus require no skill
I'm programmed to kill

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#19 05-11-2003 8:58pm

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Communication
In haikus-What next, pray tell?
In drama form too?

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#20 05-11-2003 10:45pm

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Lots of recent ones -Politics - Dr Toast

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#21 15-11-2003 7:29pm

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This thread is dying
Haikus will be gone from boards
Dont let this happen!

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#22 22-11-2003 7:13pm

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Thank God for that small
Mercy i hate all haikus
This one included

Im rather inpressed with that i didnt think id be able to write one even one as bad as the one i did write.If its wrong dnt bother telling me.

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#23 26-11-2003 5:04pm

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a blistered faith screams
reasons gone convictions bleed
answer me this...why?

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#24 26-11-2003 5:15pm

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He looks under the bed
and finds
a big gun

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#25 26-11-2003 5:17pm

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the gun is loaded
357 caliber
potent love missiles

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#26 26-11-2003 8:05pm

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Originally posted by magpie
He looks under the bed
and finds
a big gun

WTF was that?
A Haiku is 5,7,5
That was just plain weird!

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#27 26-11-2003 8:21pm

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Nice continuation tibilt

Anyhoo, it's a quote from a film called "Miami Blues".

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#28 26-11-2003 11:38pm

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stop being so pedantic jaffer. haiku is poetry. true poetry is not limited by such sadistically cruel boundries. if your going to write on the haiku thread at least write a haiku. thank you kindly magpie. by the way jaffer - i like your conversational haikus.

jingle bells ring once
die and come again too soon
why destroy magic?

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#29 27-11-2003 4:45pm

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I was just trying
To keep the thread accurate
And thank you tibilt

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#30 27-11-2003 5:21pm

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Here's a new sub-category. Haiku about 1916 leaders!

Goggle-eyed Patrick H Pearse
Spastic visionary
Of a bloody new dawning

Let's see your contributions....

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#31 27-11-2003 5:40pm

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Originally posted by tibilt
stop being so pedantic jaffer. haiku is poetry. true poetry is not limited by such sadistically cruel boundries. if your going to write on the haiku thread at least write a haiku. thank you kindly magpie. by the way jaffer - i like your conversational haikus.

jingle bells ring once
die and come again too soon
why destroy magic?

I wouldn't call that
pedantry - what he said was
quite legitimate.

If you want to write
some poetry in free verse
pick another thread!

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#32 27-11-2003 5:46pm

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Is there a stream of consciousness freeform automatic writing thread? If not why not?

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#33 27-11-2003 6:10pm

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oh jesus christ its a thread. bashó is not going to roll in his grave because we didn't strictly adhere to his haiku-form poetic style. haiku is about saying as much as you can in as few words possible. the 5,7,5 rule is for people who find it difficult to limit themselves when they speak creatively. it is not a dogma of haiku and it never was. so it was at least somewhat pedantic to question magpies haiku.

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#34 27-11-2003 8:09pm

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I see your point mate
But here's a challenge for you
Try THAT in haiku!

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#35 27-11-2003 9:58pm

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suck my left one dry
pick a hair and realize
i'm not your mother

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#36 03-12-2003 7:58pm

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How about this for a deep and meaningful one:

I stare at the wall
Its brightness nearly blinds me
So I look away.

How easy is this?

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#37 05-09-2004 2:44pm

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Where did this thread go?
Well now I have revived it
Hahahahaha

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#38 05-09-2004 5:45pm

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Some haiku would take
up this space but one does not
Please make up your own

(Someone in my school
used that in the yearbook... I
found it quite clever)

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#39 05-09-2004 8:15pm

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It's back! Shoot it! Shoot it now, before it's too late!

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#40 05-09-2004 8:19pm

It wasn't me!

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Agreed. Let it die people..... again.

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#41 05-09-2004 11:18pm

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Bah! I like haikus. I'll let it die anyway though, for lack of a stronger opinion.

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#42 06-09-2004 7:18am

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As the creator of this thread I respectfully request that neil and/or Podge lock it, delete it, or throw napalm on it

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#43 06-09-2004 5:49pm

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I cant write Haiku's
Oh, I'm writing one right now
Pfffffffft, that was easy

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#44 06-09-2004 6:13pm

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Ah! No! what the hell?!
Why are you writing haiku?
Dear lord no! shut up!

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#45 06-09-2004 6:21pm

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Sorry? Did I miss out?
On something important here?
No Haikus? Explain.

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#46 06-09-2004 6:39pm

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This thread's name pains me
I am a grammar pedant.
NO APOSTROPHE.

Ahem.

Oh dear.. I'm continuing it. But I really needed to vent that there.

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#47 06-09-2004 6:49pm

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Stop. For the love of whatever please stop.

Won't someone please think of the children?

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#48 06-09-2004 7:26pm

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Closed by request and tis an old thread in all fairness.

Dredging up old threads is bad. M'kay?

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