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The Storm {Poem}

La_Gordy · 2003-10-22 21:22:57

The Storm The screams echoed through the hall, Through every corridor and every wall. Acid drops hit he ground, The burning hiss an unforgettable sound The sky, swollen and grey Was never blue from that day. Nuclear warfare, most people said. Most of those people, now lie dead. Watching the rivers turn roasting hot, Slowly…

22-10-2003 9:22pm

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La_Gordy

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The Storm

The screams echoed through the hall,
Through every corridor and every wall.
Acid drops hit he ground,
The burning hiss an unforgettable sound

The sky, swollen and grey
Was never blue from that day.
Nuclear warfare, most people said.
Most of those people, now lie dead.

Watching the rivers turn roasting hot,
Slowly people began to rot.
Quickly the crops began to fail.
Poisons spreading by the might gale.

Faces, twisted with blisters of fire.
Bodies, bloody, ripped by barbed wire.
Nobody untouched by the storm.
The world, slowly, began to mourn.

Any feedback muchos appreciated!!!

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#2 23-10-2003 11:34am

patch

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Thats some serious imagery right there! What was your motivation?

It's effecting though, well done.

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#3 23-10-2003 8:28pm

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as patch said..good imagery, nice pretty mental images
i like

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#4 24-10-2003 12:09am

BEAT

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excellent!

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#5 24-10-2003 10:54am

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That is a very well written piece!

mm

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#6 24-10-2003 3:58pm

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I liked it although it was a little Gory...But....I am sure that was the way it was to make me feel.

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