[DaneScott]

Seriously, some of the more encouraging things I've ever heard. Thanks guys. I'll fall asleep smiling tonight. It actually means a lot.

[crazyhorsecowle]

Deservingly so danescot,
It's brilliant,I though I had commented on it but seemed to have missed it.
Well done and any more to share would be greatly welcomed.
TAKE A BOW,
you deserve it.

[DaneScott]

Jaysis man, thank you. I've never blushed before my laptop til now.
Here's another one sure:

All these surreptitious suppositions of splitting oceans,

Prose so powerful it can burst notions wide open -

These have been exposed as taciturn Trojans.

Simply your mind corroding.



The practice of doubting theologians,

Laying opinions out in the open,

Shows no more hope than

Doping and de - robing the pope, and

Pinning him to a post

For roasting and disposing.



Your salvation will not be found in revolting,

Ratifying pieties or effacing earthly vanities.

These pawns are preceded by supernatural beings,

Superseded by sacrosanct sacraments

That offer sanctuary to sanctity,

Align your efforts with ignominy

And you with heresy.



It would be best to surrender immediately.

[golden lane]

well i hope the gates are open
and the hinges are well oiled
because at last, the world has noticed
and your plan's now surely foiled

of course, you thought you were expected
and to heaven, that is so
but, you told the little children
if they told, to hell they'd go

well one day the gates, will open
but, there will be no saintly spires
for your crimes, the lord will damn you
to eternity, in hell's fires

[PurpleBee]

Maybe it's just me but a lot of the poetry posted on creative writing seems to be a little too abstract, I mean the imagery is purely metaphorical and hard to grasp as a result.

That's why I thought Danescott's moth poem was so refreshing. I mean the depth is there but the poem also functioned simply as a description of someone dismembering a moth.

Maybe I'm just criticising poetry for trying to be too poetic.

[pickarooney]

Originally Posted by PurpleBee

Maybe it's just me but a lot of the poetry posted on creative writing seems to be a little too abstract, I mean the imagery is purely metaphorical and hard to grasp as a result.

That's why I thought Danescott's moth poem was so refreshing. I mean the depth is there but the poem also functioned simply as a description of someone dismembering a moth.

Maybe I'm just criticising poetry for trying to be too poetic.

I get that impression a lot. I never know whether it's being subtle and me obtuse or if the author is deliberately holding back from saying anything of substance.

[golden lane]

Originally Posted by PurpleBee

Maybe it's just me but a lot of the poetry posted on creative writing seems to be a little too abstract, I mean the imagery is purely metaphorical and hard to grasp as a result.

That's why I thought Danescott's moth poem was so refreshing. I mean the depth is there but the poem also functioned simply as a description of someone dismembering a moth.

Maybe I'm just criticising poetry for trying to be too poetic.

maybe just a line or two
an ode, so to speak
i thought it was a cabbage
but it does, look like a leek

device, for automotive transport
or a thing that opens cans
when the scots have all the same name
they're not family, they're just clans

now i know these words are rubbish
and superficial, one might say
but they may just bring a smile or two
and i hope, brighten up your day

[DaneScott]

Originally Posted by golden lane

maybe just a line or two
an ode, so to speak
i thought it was a cabbage
but it does, look like a leek

device, for automotive transport
or a thing that opens cans
when the scots have all the same name
they're not family, they're just clans

now i know these words are rubbish
and superficial, one might say
but they may just bring a smile or two
and i hope, brighten up your day

Pleasant

[Duffy the Vampire Slayer]

First poem I've written in a long long time...

I leave awkwardly each morning,
No kiss goodbye, no parting embrace,
Guilt overcoming my animal instincts,
A longing glance upon your face.

I never wanted to hurt you or lead you astray,
No malice in my intentions, despite the pain I've brought,
I tell myself I should stop, that I'll only hurt you again,
But lust always sweeps away such thoughts.

I am not wicked-minded, my hearts not made of stone,
Yet I could avoid such heartbreak and I simply won't,
Once more you'll cry and I'll walk away coldly,
Because you want me to love you and I don't.

[DaneScott]

Originally Posted by Duffy the Vampire Slayer

First poem I've written in a long long time...

I leave awkwardly each morning,
No kiss goodbye, no parting embrace,
Guilt overcoming my animal instincts,
A longing glance upon your face.

I never wanted to hurt you or lead you astray,
No malice in my intentions, despite the pain I've brought,
I tell myself I should stop, that I'll only hurt you again,
But lust always sweeps away such thoughts.

I am not wicked-minded, my hearts not made of stone,
Yet I could avoid such heartbreak and I simply won't,
Once more you'll cry and I'll walk away coldly,
Because you want me to love you and I don't.

Lovely. I like it anyway.

[golden lane]

Originally Posted by Duffy the Vampire Slayer

First poem I've written in a long long time...

I leave awkwardly each morning,
No kiss goodbye, no parting embrace,
Guilt overcoming my animal instincts,
A longing glance upon your face.

I never wanted to hurt you or lead you astray,
No malice in my intentions, despite the pain I've brought,
I tell myself I should stop, that I'll only hurt you again,
But lust always sweeps away such thoughts.

I am not wicked-minded, my hearts not made of stone,
Yet I could avoid such heartbreak and I simply won't,
Once more you'll cry and I'll walk away coldly,
Because you want me to love you and I don't.

.

very true.....great words...

[Insect Overlord]

Best Wishes

If one, by chance, should come to read
Some sample of my poetry,
I wish that there-in they will find
The work of a creative mind.

I wish to them that it be known,
Whether through image, sound or tone,
That I have always sought out new
Vehicles for my point of view.

I do not seek celebrity;
Just that these scribbles may be seen
And valued by a friendly eye
That finds wherein these words truths lie.

[pickarooney]

Blog-pimping in rhyming form. Got to hand it to you

[Insect Overlord]

Originally Posted by pickarooney

Blog-pimping in rhyming form. Got to hand it to you

The poem's about three years old, but I'm enjoying the extra mileage I'm getting from it this week. I should be ready to unleash the newer stuff from Write Club over the next few months.

[golden lane]

great stuff io.....